Hey Carlos it's kayla! I love the story already!

it has a good idea and set up so far, but im not sure if the computer rearranged the paragraphs or it was a mistake, it makes it more difficult to follow thier conversations. Few grammer errors. But otherwise, it takes a fresh idea and incorporates popular, and loved elements that allows the reader to connect and get a more personal enjoyement. Good idea, keep it going.