| Reviews for I Am a Foster Child |
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bkies 5/18/13 . chapter 1This story first got my attention when it stated, "Dad and I". Whatever follows I assume will be the influence of having just one parent. It really establishes that moving around with one parent can affect your life. It does a good job of expressing that even though moving so much is causing problems, it is not going to stop. |
Guest 1/2/13 . chapter 1 No u r not a bad writer |
Erik's Angel Forever 12/24/12 . chapter 6That was awesome! |
Miggles 12/21/12 . chapter 6Merry Christmas to you too! Love the way you keep your chapters short and sweet. The perfect length for me to read as soon as you update, no matter what I'm doing! I could only pick out a couple of spelling errors, but apart from that, still great! :D |
Poppy 12/17/12 . chapter 1 Really awesome story, read it through, very compelling. In fact, it reminded me of Jacqueline Wilson if not better. |
Oci Oceana 12/16/12 . chapter 5Hi! Great Story.. write 6th chapter soon PLZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ... Nicky |
Miggles 12/16/12 . chapter 5Still really good! :D Just a suggestion, but it seems to be getting a little old with her running away etc, and going to foster homes. If she does move again, put her in a home with lots of foster kids, or in one of those big houses for children without a foster family. :) Keep going, because it doesn't seem to make you write any faster the more I review! :D |
Miggles 12/10/12 . chapter 4"Go ahead and through it away," he said, nodding at the balled-up poster still in my hand. "We don't need I anymore." - I think it's meant to be 'throw' and either the policeman means, 'Well I don't need it anymore', or 'We don't need it anymore.' And I thin you mean hold on, not 'his hold in my arm'. :) To make the bullet points clearer when Sasha lists the reasons she doesn't want to be hugged by Annie, maybe you should put each on a new line. Also, I think you mean being not 'been shipped off'. Otherwise, I still love it! :D Update soon please. |
Miggles 11/24/12 . chapter 3Okay, loving the originality and the way you're making it realistic. However, it all moved a bit too fast in the first chapter, and it wouldn't really work like that. Firstly, it seems unlikely that all that sensitive stuff about her dad and the ribbery would be blurted out in one breath in a public place; they would have taken her aside. Secondly, they would have talked to her about fostering also in a more private place, and neither would they march into the school and disrupt things; they would probably come after school or wait until a break to take her away. These made it seem a little unrealistic, but apart from that I love everything so far and can't wait for the update! :D |
aw0417 11/22/12 . chapter 1Very good work! Indeed! I love this book! |