|Reviews for Queen Of Darkness|
| Creynolds 11/23/12 . chapter 1
This is extremely hard to read. The formatting - everything bundled together in two giant paragraphs - makes my eyes cross. There's a bit too much description of all the characters; it feels like the beginning of a play when everyone comes out and bows at the audience. Perhaps space it out a little?
Anyhow, keep up the good work.