I love how this chapter plays up the "what if" scenario. Namely, "What if Alvor hadn't gone bad?" Looking at this chapter, it's painfully clear that Alvor and Rovla should have been the perfect team. It makes Alvor's treachery all the more tragic.

Well, this is a very nice chapter, especially the discriptions in the first Overseers journal. It made me feel as if I was reading, hmm how shall I say it, an encyclopedia or something. Anyway, very nice job. Looking foward to see more.

Sorry I haven't reviewed in a while. When a story starts getting long, I start running out of ideas of what to say in my reviews, so I Just wanted to let you know that I'm still here, still reading, and still loving what I'm reading..

Hmm, not much to go by, other than Zeali planning to destroy Kibila with one swift stroke; but then, all bad guys do, and what do they get? They get dead! :) Can't wait for the next update.

AWESOME STORY! I cannot wait for the next chapter! I can't wait for the NEXT time Kibila and Zeali fight it out!

Can't wait for the inevitable duel that is to follow! Eagerly awaiting for the next chapter!

I think I may have found a small continuity error. You said that no one can hold an Overseer's sword except for the Overseer it was forged for. However, in chapter 12 Kibila hands Rovla's sword to her. But on the happy side of things, you did a great job with the fight scene between Kibila and Zeali.

One of your best chapters! I loved the descriptions of the different sould 'layouts' that Power was talking about, and I know what mine would be, should I be an Overseer! Guess what it is? That's right! You've guessed it (Not! XD), a gigantic SPACESHIP! LOL

Well, anyway this was an awesome chapter!

I would suggest using the word 'Evil' instead of bad for when describing the duel nature of the souls. Reason being is that I feel that the word 'Evil' makes it more menacing than 'Bad'. All in all, it's a great story!

I was reading this after watching a Youtube fight of Pre Visla vs Darth Maul, so I was imagining Kibila's sword sounding like the Darksaber as she fought against the 'aliens'? I was imagining them as human, but I could be wrong.

Cool story, I'll be reading more to find what this is all about! ;)

Ooooh, this is sooo intriguing! Zeali sure seems like the most evil person you would never want to meet. But, sometimes, I wish I had her eyes! xD
Still, how come nobody noticed Zeali's presence on the Overseer main planet? Also, was she an Overseer before turning mad with power?
Anyway, this story surely needs more readers, it's beautiful!

I just have one question; is Kibila's apprentice named Rovla or Rolva? Because you've spelled it both ways in most chapters. Also I am officially ready to favorite this story; I'm thoroughly enjoying it.

Impressive! A very good chapter indeed. I gotta say, I laughed a bit at Salera slapping Kibila in her sleep, an when the latter one had to scream at the sleeper so she would wake up. x3
And now, the party pooper has entered the scene! Will she destroy the entire universe? Is Kibila going to stop her before any great harm is done? Will she manage to kill an Overseer? 0.0
Guess we'll find that out. Great chapter. Keep it up!(that evil one already looks like a badass :S )

Bravo, a good chapter. As far as your ability to write fight scenes goes, I actually thought that was pretty good. I think the villian of the story should be introduced soon, though, or at least something "out of the ordinary" should happen.