This first chapter has potential. dont get me wrong i think it's the beginning of a really good idea, but check your sentence construction to get it to flow alot better cuz i feel like im reading myself into circles, trying to figure out what was meant by what was said.

This was an interesting first chapter; it was pretty enticing. At times I wasn't able to discern who was speaking, but that could simple be fixed. Also, a few times punctuation was incorrect with dialogue. Such as "Of course we are" which should instead be "Of course we are," Great story! Write on!