Wonderful chapter. I liked the interactions between Kit and Fletcher.

Again, really good job! I can't wait to see what happens next. Your characters and plot are really developing well.

I really like this so far! You've got a great writing style and I can't wait to see what happens next! Great job
E

Excellent! We're getting into the meat of the story now. Great work!

A cliffhanger! Damn! You are an excellent writer and I hope you update soon.

Great start. You have me hooked!

I can really tell that you put a lot of work into each chapter. Your chapters are long and a lot happens, but I'm always left wanting for more. I love your cliffhangars.
Mettie

Interesting, but it seems to be moving a tad slower than the story calls for. Longer sentences, calmer feel. Shorter sentences, suspensful mood. All of your sentences are pretty long.

This story is simply remarkable! I haven't read anything near as good as this on fictionpress in...well, this is the best thing I've read on Fictionpress. If I saw this story in the bookstore, I'd buy it and reccomend the book to my friends:)