I love the rhythm created by the countdown! I also love the way I can really picture the scene...I almost want to act it out as I read!1:)

Very nice. I like how the clock counts down to the end, but doesn't even reach twelve, signaling that not only we cannot escape the faith of every human, but often we aren't even given all our time before the end. Though it might have been unintentionally. ;-)
Keep up the good work.

I never have nightmares, but this sounds like it would send me flying off my bed xD