Brilliant story so far.:-)

Oops, I didn't know that it already showed up, so I accidently posted two reviews. Just choose which word choice of them you like better, because they both say basically the same thing. Anyways, please post more soon!

Hi. I've been reading your story for a while, I must say-It's amazing. The complex, realistic thinking of two friends who have been away from each other in this chapter was just breathtaking. The whole plot has multiple twists and turns, making it unpredictable, which makes people want to read more. Also, because of the complaints of less reviews, let me just say-there are at least 8 billion people in the world, and most don't even have a clue about this whole website. I must say that they are definitely missing out. Some of the best stories in the world are here, and they are absolutely free. One of those amazing, breathtaking, unpredictable stories is this one.I seriously suggest the after you finish this, you should get it published. Of course, after you edit it a little.(Here comes the criticism, don't take it personally, this story is amazing, especially for your first one.) The beginning paragraph is a bit simple, it doesn't exactly want the reader to keep reading after the first paragraph. This is only to help you. Most publishing companies just read the first sentence or two to see the quality of the whole thing. And even if you don't edit it, i'm pretty sure you would get it published. If they toss it out after the first sentences, well, they obviously have a mental problem, and they would miss out on one of the best stories I have ever read( and trust me, I have read a lot of books over my life). This is a great series, and I hope you'll post more soon!

Hi. I have been reading your story, and, let me just say-it's amazing. The complex, realistic thought of the two sisters being away from each other in this chapter is breathtaking, and there are so many twists and turns in this series that the plot is unpredictable, making it suspenceful and makes readers want to read more. And for your complaining of no reviews, there are at least 8 billion people in the world, and most of them don't have a clue about this website. And I will say that they're missing out, because this website has some of the best stories in the world, and it's all completely , one of them is this series. I seriously suggest that after you finish this series, you should consider getting it published. I'm pretty sure that it would get published, of course, after you edit it first.(Here comes the criticism, but don't take it personally-this is an amazing series, especially since this is your first novel.) The beginning is a bit boring, and it does not exactly want the reader to continue reading it. If you edit it, I suggest you do that part first. This is only to help you. Most publishing editors usually just take the first sentences or two, and if it's not so perfect, some toss it into a junk pile. But even if you don't edit, I'm pretty sure it would still get published. And if they only read the first sentences then threw it out, well, they obviously have a mental problem, and would have missed out on one of the most excellent series I have ever read( and believe me, I have read a LOT of books in my life, even though I'm only 11 years old. Also, I also write some pretty good stories that get A's, but when I started reading your story, my stories looked pretty wimpy in comparison).I love your series, and I hope you will post more soon!

Please finish this off :)

Your profile was so halarious! It made my day! Now, back to the story!

Soo good...
What exactly happened to Ms. Brown? How did she find them washing clothes?

Puyallup? Mohegan?
*Coughing to hide snickers*
Anyways, really good. You are so good at writing it makes me depressed.
Yeah, Frisca should kill people and Joe should, like, I dunno.

Brilliant again. I believe neither Frisca or Joe should have had custody of anyone. Nothing wrong with this! Keep up the good work :)

Joe should die. Seriously, he's an ass.
On a more serious note, OMFG Py is her sister? Didn't see that coming. Anyhoo, I like it. Updates are fun... hint hint!

PM: Private Messaging, although you probably figured that out already! BTW, I love love love the story. Py is super cool!

For a while, I had a suspicion that Mo and Py were sisters around chapter 4, and now you have confirmed it! Thanks! Still loving the story.
Yours sincerely,
Loob88 (who is a megafan of this story)

I have been waiting sooooo long for this chapter! It seems like years. I have loved the story from the first chapter. I hope Mo's OK!

Who is to go against popular opinion? If majority think she's fat, she's fat.
Pressure, pressure. Personally, I think you need to get some action in the plot already.
What did happen to Mo, exactly? ( Don't flame at me don't flame at me)

Arista, cool story. ( wait, should I even put your name on here? Well your last name isn't on here so whatevs.) You better post again soon; I despise cliff hangers. But this story is better than your Harris Burdick one; really!
PS I think you know who I am.
PPS What does the follow button do?