"dead city" and "heart heavy" those are cliché images. Give me something real and something you feel. Favorite line so far "Wide with eternal fear of their demise" it sounds beautiful when read out loud. Good use of line length. The shorter section was very powerful. I think you could do away with the capitalization of the start of every line. It was nice to see someone who doesn't use punctuation. It lets the reader dictate where to stop and start. "true loves kiss" is this a fairy tale? "Meaning had be renewed" been? "As the Soldier walked alone" I think you can cut this line off. I felt that the line before ending the poem at a stronger place.

Hey! I'm returning a review here. Firstly, thank you so much for your really sweet review on "Scarred." :)
The poem is beautiful. I'm a huge poetry fan myself and my favourite poets range from Robert Frost, Ernest Hemmingway and William Wordsworth so when I write a poem myself I really analyse it like crazy - desperate to please and perfect.
So I have to say, I'm very impressed. Not only does "The Soldier" have a moral but it also is beautifully written - you didn't once make me roll my eyes or use language that got boring. You managed to keep it interesting while writing in a very light, beautiful style about a topic so intense. I'm also very amazed that the inspiration was a nightmare because that's impressive - writing about something personal and close to you, yet making it so universal. Great job :)

Whoa. That was amazing. Just. Wow. I wish I could write that beautifully.

This is really good xx Well done :)

This is a beautifully written, stunning poem! I loved everything about it - your wording is fantastic and so is the topic you chose and the way you treated it. I've never experienced war but it doesn't take a genius to realize that war are things people do for a living and there cannot be real heros or victors.

Great stuff, i loved it.

Trust me, I'm not here to copy anything. If I want a poem to publish, I'll write it MYSELF. That would be disrespectful (something I've been getting a lot of by almost everyone at my stupid middle school).

I loved the last line for some reason. 'As the soldier walked alone'. The wording (for the whole poem) is beautifully written, and not flowery. My friend, there's a fine line between flowery and beautiful, and you didn't step a toe into 'flowery'.

Hermie