haha u

This is hilarious! It's a good . . . poem? Haha.

LOL, sounds like an anime theme song. . .from K-on! or something?

LOVE IT.

hi Yuki,

I don't know what to say. Your poem format isn't the best. For errors, there are unnecessary uses of bold and ellipses. Very little capital letters, but I might know why; also, there's spaced quotes and few typos. As for the story itself, seems pretty rough. As in, you had a rough life.

Here and there it's good, but other times its an awkward read. The flow/rhythm of the reading is awkward. It might have to do with the format. Is it a poem or a short story? I suggest looking over it to proofread.

I like the ending.

A lot of what you wrote applies to me too, like the crazy, lazy, eating and sleeping part :P...anyway, I like this poem! :D

I loved the ending, its really interesting your posts.