I swear I reviewed this when it came out...
Probably I just said something on the forum and didn't anyway here goes.

Unlike everyone whose saying 'this is like SAO,' or 'when I clicked on this I thought it was like SAO but then I realized it's not,' or even 'har har har, I assume this is your take on SAO.' It isn't. For one SAO doesn't start in media-res, but you've taken that on. However, seeing this might properly seem to be Chapter 9, I guess you have the whole story already planned out, unless one memoir takes more than a chapter. However if this really is the end... and it's memoir 9... it seems kinda short considering how much you have to get to become a Reaper. Which means the timeskips would be gigantic and I'm just rambling on right now trying to predict what's going to happen.

Either way, White Mage who gives up all your items and equipment, 666,666,666G, and be relegated back to level 1 with your stats and abilities while fighting monsters at the Corpse Garden that all over level 70 sounds pretty hardcore. Hardcore in a good way.

A bonding moment on a quest? Now what I read allowed some questions of my own but I guess I'm just being too eager for only two chapters. Your chapters cover a good segment but at the same time I can't shake off the idea they're slightly short, I blame the other books that I be reading for the most part.

lol, bashing on SAO. Are you personally saying- "This is how you do it?"

I like to admit that was quite the amusing twist I seen. Now I'm stupidly curious about his background or how much of a time lapse since Asagi is no longer a character to my notice. I thought SAO at first because it's decent but your story amuses way more then what that could do, lost count how many times I ended dropping it.

Looking forward to the continuation of this.

Just wondering but did you mean to have so many shout outs to the other MMO based anime and games out there? It feels like Sword Art Online mixed with .Hack GU. But I thought the story was cool for an opening and there was a nice ending in a way and it did get me interested.

Corrections listed below

she pointed a gargantuan tree that stretched beyond the clouds that was far from the two. -it should say "pointed out a" or "pointed to a".

see hooded young man in a ragged cloak-"see a" it's just missing the a. And also an a to the magic staff later on in the paragraph.

Isn't that pretty girly a name?-forgot the a again, lol, between that and pretty

like ruins of a temple-"the" between like and ruins

Her ands started to fade away in a blue hue-That's supposed to be hands, right? You forgot the "h".

leaving only the sound of the rain to be heard-it's a nice line, but personally, I don't think you need the "to be heard" part.

Kishin grip on his blade was tighter than before-it's suppossed to be a 's to make Kishin's grip.

I liked this one. At first, I thought, "What? After that touching scene, he is traipsing about with these random chicks?" But the resolution at the end cleared that up. The Reaper challenge is also very interesting. I have to know how the Fullmetal Reaper did it.

But I do agree with the other guy on the town name. It's just...weird for a virtual fantasy world setting.

Thought it was gonna be a light read for me to get my own engines (writing) started, but wow! The plot really caught me off guard :o

The boy's consciousness started to dissipate as he body almost failed on him. - small typo here. "his body".

:o "Czechoslovkia"? Don't be lazy and go research or think of a better name. :p

Aw! That stinger at the end, a good one nonetheless. Do continue this! :D

Oh I honestly thought this was going to be another copy of Swort Art Online, which would've let me down since your other story's so awesome . Fortunately, it wasn't. But I suggest that you change the summary a little, just to make sure nobody comes and lames your story for being similar O.o

Wow, that was an amazing opening chapter, I'm totally hooked! Your descriptions were really good and let me easily picture everything in my mind. I can't wait to see what happens next!

That was interesting. I always enjoy all your stories, but this one seems deeper then how you usually write. I don't know what the Guest was saying in his review, he totally didn't get the point or plotline of your story! )o_O(
I'm wondering what ever happened to Asagi. She seemed important to Kishin...
By the way, are you always designing the coverart for your stories?! They're amazing!

Wow...
That was a very entertaining read XD
The use of the name Kishin was genius!
At first, I thought you just killed off the main character but...
That twist, man... XD
This story is great! Can't wait to read more, Edge! XD

...Did you even get to the end?

The concept is too similar to Sword Art Online and the name sounds like was derived from Blade & Soul. It has potential but right now its just a mimickry