| Reviews for Eyes of Evil |
|---|
lizzy 5/7/13 . chapter 1 OMG pls go on I love it |
lizzy 4/26/13 . chapter 13 Wow its great but sad plls update soon |
myheart4you 2/2/13 . chapter 10It's just... And he's gonna... But... But... Okay, I'll write that all out. It's just so sad that she likes him but we all know what's going to happen but she likes him and its sooo sad :( |
myheart4you 1/12/13 . chapter 2This seems so innocent compared to the prologue. I hate that I know what's coming, or maybe it's better so I don't get attached to Richard -_- |
myheart4you 1/12/13 . chapter 1What? What? That's awful. Just that last sentence made me want to read more. I have so many questions now... I'm going to read more :) |
GracieAnne13 12/18/12 . chapter 3Love it! |
GracieAnne13 12/18/12 . chapter 2Keep up the good work! |
Baulemare 12/11/12 . chapter 1The main thing with an abusive relationship is how it progresses and gets worse. You've just jumped into the story here, so people can't connect with the characters as easy. If you started from the beginning, when they liked each other at the beginning, then to the progression, then the way they are now; then people would be able to connect with them. You could also get more writing material out of it that way. The sentences are pretty small and they aren't that descriptive. The biggest sentence was the last sentence, which isn't really good. I'm positive you have potential though. |