I was wondering if you thought up the title afterward or if you thought of the title and then wrote a poem to fit it? All in all, I enjoyed it. Nicely done.

I do like the vivid imagery used in this. Keep it up.

I found it interesting that this one was centered when the first was not.
This brings some really awesome visuals to mind. nice work!

This is a nice, simple piece. Good work. I like it.