LOVE it! Cool story! (:

Is this a parody of typical love stories? If so, good job.

if not: Um...while I enjoyed the plot twist at the end, I felt some of the phrases you used are redundant. Like in 'Silently. couldn't speak. The ability ...' Only one of the three would have been enough to convey the message that she was speechless. The full stops feel improperly placed. I also felt her saying 'I like you' was very not wallflowery but the way you ended justifies that.