This is really good! I love the bite-sized chapters, it really keeps me reading :D

This story is going places, hopefully. I like it. It could be written better but... Oh well.

Being immortal must be hard...

I LOVE lasagne! It made me laugh to hear about it.

Ha, her blushing is funny! :)

Very interesting! I like it!

Great start!

This talk of immortality is very interesting. Good job.

I liked that they ate lasagna, as that is my faavorite food, and it was cute how Aliki called her sweetie.

Net ball sounds interesting. Like it was, creative for you to make up such a sport.

Interesting. Plus, the name Rue makes me think of the Hunger Games.

OOOO, sounds interesting. What are you doing, lecturing your sister? This sounds like Mockingjay, a little. But not enough lol. I liked it!

I never expected this! You do many unexpected things, I love it.

As for your conventions, I saw that you leave out a letter in a word and that makes it a whole new word. That, and you need to indent when a new person is speaking, typically.

Other than that, great job. This piece is growing, and with a little nurturing, it will be beautiful.

I really like this story, its interesting

LASAGNA! Damn, now I have a craving...
Unexpected twist of events... Update soon, I wanna know MORE!