This chapter was very confusing. I didn't like the romance aspect added and the two world thing seems to not be explained thoughly enough. Some words seem like they could of had better replacements. This was hard to get into and seemed yo have a good amount of extra filler. Try revising it and making it shorter with a few words changed. I know it seems as if I completed hated this but I liked the idea of the story just not the way it was conveyed.

Hmm... I am confused, but I like the description and I'm very interested in her talent she has. This is really peeking my interest, I've never read anything like this.

Interesting, I like the preface. It's makes me want to read more, very interesting. I also really like the title. :)