|Reviews for Next on Her List|
| 4everandalwaysme 12/18/12 . chapter 1
I think this could use a little bit of editing, just to make it easier to read, and draw more readers to it:
- Make a new paragraph whenever someone speaks.
- Don't rush things. Keep it slow and steady at first, easing your way into the climax.
- Put enough details. But not too much. :)
I'm really interested in finding out what happens next :D Update soooon!