|Reviews for Hell's Punishment|
| imran102 6/13/13 . chapter 18
Awesome chapter...but seriously, Lucfi not recognizing Azrael? What the hell? They were both around during the War in Heaven! Of course they would know each other! They're the freaking original ArchAngels!
BTW, Lucifer's name while he was an angel was Samael/Samiel. You could change it to Samiella or something.
| Benidate86 6/13/13 . chapter 13
Still spot some little bogies: ommited words and whatnot. I think I spotted a 'My little sis can't be this cute' reference.
| Benidate86 6/13/13 . chapter 12
bwhahahaha. 'The power of Christ compels you.' Never get tired of that one.
| Benidate86 6/9/13 . chapter 8
Let's see, Demons, crazy angel, butcher yandere, gansta mom... Hayate Ayasaki is no longer the most unfortunate being on the planet. I weep for him.
In other news. Awwww, Mikey's so cute.
| Benidate86 6/9/13 . chapter 7
YANDERE FOR THE WIN!
| Benidate86 6/9/13 . chapter 6
I know your writing would have a changed a lot from this, but most of the narratives in this chapter were too direct; similies, metaphors or allusions would have helped. Also,some of them gave away the cherry far too soon .eg: the Mika Odin introduction was, in my opinion, redundant; John yelling 'Mika' did the job much better. Got to stretch the tension that extra bit.
Now if you'll excuse me, I'll be getting back to my daily whipping.
| Benidate86 6/8/13 . chapter 5
Dont Interrupt my daily whipping! And here I thought they were toruring some poor soul. Haha good stuff. A little less 'tell' and a little more 'show' would be great.
| Benidate86 6/8/13 . chapter 3
Very funny, very manga-esque. But some parts of it break suspension of disbelief. Poor angel...
| Y. S. Wong 5/18/13 . chapter 1
Midget gangsters. Now there's something you don't see everyday. LOL.
The devil's sex slave, huh? Kinky.
Your typical brand of humor pervades in this story as usual. I'm guessing this is gonna be a variation of the romcom? Plot-wise, not necessarily the most original idea, but that doesn't matter because in these types of stories it's the execution that matters. If the jokes are there and they're funny, then that's what's important.
| imran102 5/14/13 . chapter 16
One question: Why is Azrael is so damn OOC here? He was always depicted as being completely loyal to God, and he never fights, not even in the War in Heaven. So why?
Well, it was a good chapter. Some foreshadowing about Mika, and Jofiel and Lucfi are being jealous.
| Argentum Vir 4/22/13 . chapter 12
Hehe, I think I just imagined John as a badass. Just casually holding Satan by the wing. "Now apologize and never do this again." xD
| Argentum Vir 4/22/13 . chapter 11
Kind of short and anticlimactic for a chapter about John's return. We didn't even get a glimmer of his powers. :/ I noticed a few words missing in between sentences. Some of them felt awkward so you might want to look at that.
| Argentum Vir 4/22/13 . chapter 10
This was a pretty good end to the arc, though I feel there should have been a little more action. Like a sparring match, or a huge gang battle between the midgets and John (after the defeat of their leader.) So far so good, I'm going to keep reading.
| Argentum Vir 4/22/13 . chapter 9
It's the angel's heart, that must be it. Super strength, perhaps a bit of magic? Invisibility? Please don't tell me he gets invisibility. :O
| Argentum Vir 4/22/13 . chapter 8
Just another day in a dismal futuristic dystopia? Me thinks so. I think I like how the plot has turned out so far. I hope you find a way to make his life get worse. I derive some sick sense of satisfaction from how bad his life keeps getting.
Little bit of criticism here though. Put any sort of character thoughts into italicised text instead of dialogue tags.