I love the title of this piece. Again, lovely imagery. The first and last lines are especially strong.

This is amazing, I loved the beautifully dark imagery of 'cloud-eyes are oil creases'. Really good poem, keep writing!

a very creative and moving use of words. i like it :)

Absolutely love this! Fantastic use of words and they flow well together.

Wow.. This is just... wow.. I love it.. absolutely.. amazing! great job!

I don't want you to be without sleep. Really.

There is no mud upon my feet as I tiptoe closer to YOU. I just wanted to add that.