|Reviews for Marked: Greed|
| Miggles 2/19/13 . chapter 3
Really enjoying it so far - still a few errors and a couple of sections that could be tweaked to help it flow more. I also think all this history could be condensed down or split up through other chapters so we find out little by little what the group is all about - it'll keep the suspense going. :)
| Miggles 1/2/13 . chapter 2
There are a few spelling and grammatical errors, such as "Well what is a pretty girl up here in a tree?" - I think something's missing from this sentence, like 'doing'. Otherwise, its well-written.
A great idea though - a school to train slayers who are also vampires :D
Looking forwards to the next chapter. :)
| DepartingSoul 1/1/13 . chapter 2
Suspenseful. I like it. Your description on characters is great. Loved how you showed how she turned into a, Shadow Hunter. And the cliffhanger was definitely a bonus. Please update soon.
| Miggles 12/30/12 . chapter 1
I like the idea, but I am very confused. I think this'll be a great story, but I really do think you need to edit some of this prologue to make it easier to understand. I agree with the other reviewer; it's the sentence structure. You need to break up some of them to aid the flow.
However, I like your choice of words and the way you've made it feel archaic yet modern.
Looking forwards to chapter one. :)
| xLunaRorax 12/30/12 . chapter 1
Wow! Amazing start! I can't wait to read more! :)
Keep it up!
| BloodWillSpill 12/30/12 . chapter 1
Your prologue kept my interest but your sentence structure was a little clumsy. But your story does look good!