I like the plot, and the story itself is pretty well done. Just one thing- in the third chapter, second paragraph, you named the doodle people "Cade" and "Jaclyn". I'm not sure if it's supposed to be that way or not, but I thought maybe that it was a mistake and you meant Andrew instead of Cade, because it's in Andrew's point of view. Maybe you were still on Cade mode or something? Just a thought. Other than that, it's pretty good. I don't have a FP account but i'll try to keep tabs on this story, I really like it. Nice job.

i have to say, his story is hilarious. :P