|Reviews for Witch Hunter|
| Luna's Child 2/6/13 . chapter 4
I feel like this chapter could have been longer and have more detail added to it. Also, it's crazy of Ariana to suddenly get a crush on the person who will kill her. *Shrugs. Oh well, not my problem xP.
Anyways, good chapter and I look forward to reading more :)
| kedros 2/3/13 . chapter 3
(I was surprised my arm was still attached to my body at that point.) the brakes are unneccesary here. he truly thought this, thus part of the story.
i kept on thinking there is an odd mood around simon, much like he's just a child that knows little. I suggest you give him a more adult aura by letting him do his job; investigating the 'witch', asking questions and such, as if he does it every time.
this shouldn't get in the way of the doubts simon experiences, or romantic path you're heading into
also, I still want to know more about all that witch stuff. as far as I see, the village is just ridiculously stupid. As if they could burn every girl with a beautiful voice?!
| Luna's Child 1/26/13 . chapter 3
About time you updated your story :P.
Anyways, I'd laugh if the guy does end up falling for the witch xD. That would be so ironic. Great chapter :)
| Briony Black 1/12/13 . chapter 2
Very interesting chapter! They both seem to be at dead ends-only one can benefit, which creates suspense. I can see that Ariana is innocent, but I definitely sympathize with Simon.
Can't wait for chapter 3!
| kedros 1/12/13 . chapter 2
[(I even did air quotes with my fingers)] should be said outside the quotation.
[(The Lost Art of Music)he] doesnt need the brakes and must leave a space between ) and he :)
It felt like this will become a long fairy tale?
then about the story. the first two chapters could have been a bit longer, by describing your characters, their surroundings,... to get into the mood of the story, to get a hold of the time and right feeling. you probably had something medieval in your head, no? you should have passed that image to us through your words in these chapters!
Ariana (nice name) is somewhat not right. especially her first impression towards us. she was cheerful, letting simon into her house, though there should be plenty of people calling her witch and such... I would be aggitated when there was another person calling me a witch. once in the house she can become confident about her innocense like you did here.
I've read this story because the name is the same as a manga im currently reading (which is really good). so i'll be comparing your story to that one probably. The fist comparrison is about the witches, as i wnt to know how your kind of witches are Exactly.
| Luna's Child 1/12/13 . chapter 2
Once again, this was an excellent chapter. I like how you added humor in their dialogue. Also, thanks for mentioning me in your update. I look forward to reading more.
| Briony Black 1/5/13 . chapter 1
This seems like an interesting start. I am looking forward to hearing more! :)
| Luna's Child 1/5/13 . chapter 1
I liked the chapter. It was interesting, and also because Sharon is my name XD.
Keep up the good work!