What a lovely imaginative atmosphere you've created with just a few lines. I especially loved that last line. Well done!

I like the last line best. "butterfly wars" makes me think of an unrequited love or some sort of bitter-sweet turmoil, great piece. :)

Continue to write.

This is so pretty! Beautiful imagery. The last line only has 4 syllables though? Still fantastic! Write on :)
Anna :)