It's very well written, with maybe two grammatical errors. As a poem, I think this needs a little more depth. As for a song, it might need a final verse before you end with the chorus, something that breaks from the pattern. Overall, a pretty good job.

RevolvesAroundYou

This touched me. I had a boyfriend, his mom absolutely abhorred me, we kissed in front of her, she yelled at him and ignored me from that point on, but he didn't care.