Tina turkey... Good story... Bennett essay...

OMG Asuye-WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON HERE? Is Arthur this guy Luciano? What is wrong with Elaine? You have my mind SPINNING in a million trillion places right now! I will be bouncing off the walls for the next chapter to find out what happened here.

Humm... Never knew that you were the kind who likes to write sappy love stories... But it's pretty good

I actually ENJOYED this and I am going to ASSUME she had been in LOVE before and he died? I am really hoping that you might go into detail later on as to how he died and if he didn't then why he is no longer there unless he could't handle her accident and how she was affected from it-BEAUTIFULLY DONE!

Ok my curiosity has been thoroughly piqued and am dying to know what Arthur's cousin was trying to warn her about and if maybe it is even true! I will definitely be looking for more of this story-I have to know what is and will happen! Great job Asuye!

Very interesting story Asuye-my heart breaks for Elaine and I do not understand how or why they would leave her name off of her mother's gravestone or mention they only have 4 daughters-that down right pissed me off but I know it must be needed for the story BUT it still upset me at their callousness of her. I am definitely looking forward to more of this story-very good writing!

I do feel as though we have come to this revelation to early, but that's just my nature as I write far too long novels myself. I love how you gave the man an accent through your dialect. Very nicely done! I'd love to see more :)

Hey :)
So as a whole I really like this beginning and where it's going, you have lovely imagery, especially with the painting. I also get the impression that this story is set back in the day? I hope I read into that right :) I like your main character, she has charm, but I do hope that Arthur gains a little more personality and perhaps less of a "perfect" feel.
Another thing you may want to look out for is tense, there was some awkward phrasing that included present tense in this first chapter, and it actually threw me off a little bit, but perhaps that's just me haha.
Anyway, keep writing :) and I'm onto the next chapter

Amazing !