FRED! REALLY GOODE! :)

Okay, the story itself has the potential to be really god. However, there are a few problems. I almost clicked off the story when I read your authors note. Why? Because there was no punctuation. I did read your first chapter but when writing numbers, you should write them in words; for example 6 would become 'six.'.

Just some advice, I don't mean to sound harsh.

shtuff...hmmm interesting...DIE DIE DIE! ahaha UPDATE SOOON YOU LOONY BIN! (you know who this is right?) Let me say this...FAT UNICORNS ARE RHINOS. NARWHALS AND HORSES HAVE SEX *im-mature laugh* AND CREATE UNICORNS. Jezz is Townsend. Oliver is Solomon. Steve is Mosckowitz. Krepper wants me dead (he's Dr. Steve Sanders) Yh I guess you figered it was "Cammie" (not saying real name) Reply on FanFic account plz x

there are a few mistakes...did you proof read? Apart from that this is REALLY good! ... was that a quote from the 3rd Hunger Games book? update sooon

You know who this is right? Reply on my fanfiction account coz I CBA to log in :/ ANYWAY! Update sooon because this was *barney stinson voice* Awesome! ... look him up... ANYWAY1 (btw the robots will win...they always win)

REALLY GOODE! (you know who it is...it wont let me log in...yhhhh CHAMELEON STYLE!) ANYWAY! Update soooon XD XD

Really goode update soon proof read before putting it up i think there are a few mistakes in grammar and missing words. apart from that UPDATE SOON

That's a good story, I like it!