A lot of grammar errors but an incredibly intriguing story. I loved it.

This is the type of thing you'd want to put on your profile, not post as a "story," because it's really not a story. I think you may alienate a lot of readers because you got them excited for the story (because your summary is great!) and then gave them an explanation instead. Just speculation of course.

Hey :)
It's been a long time for me since I was last active on this site, and I think with time my tastes have changed a little as I never would have used to gone to a science fiction text.
I was a little disappointed to see that this was just an authors note, but thankfully a well written and intriguing one. I'm interested to see where this goes.