|Reviews for Across the Universe|
| FlickeringTheFlame 5/23/13 . chapter 1
You have succeeded in making me anxious to read on, young padowan (geeky star-wars reference :P)
| Guilty Bystanders 5/18/13 . chapter 9
and that your darkest secret is that sometimes when no one's looking you-"
You can't just not finish that sentence!
| Guilty Bystanders 5/13/13 . chapter 8
"Does that make you horny?"
I think I did a big of a double take as Kraal did. Awesome chapter.
| inkfngrz 5/13/13 . chapter 8
OK, I was wondering how on earth this story could possibly be better than awesome and you've done it yet again in a single chapter!
"Control your young," is a phrase I wish I came up with!
| inkfngrz 5/10/13 . chapter 7
They're awesome. Honestly. Can I have one of each? PLEASE?!
| Guilty Bystanders 5/6/13 . chapter 7
I like Danny, Theresa, and Ree 2.0!
| Guilty Bystanders 4/16/13 . chapter 6
Hmm. I like both your stories. I can't really picture them crossing over. I like pretty much all your characters. Thereasa, (not spelling it right) Danny, and Ree would have to be in it. What would you do with Katie and the rest from this story? Who would take who's spot? PM me, my parallelogram-bee-shark-horse-lime-crustacian friend.
| inkfngrz 4/15/13 . chapter 6
(ever consider starting a forum?)
| inkfngrz 4/2/13 . chapter 5
YAY! Another chapter!
OK, I still like Kraal!
And Carl's pretty funny.
I'm waiting for more. . . :)
| Katie 3/27/13 . chapter 2
Katie eh? I think it would be good if you added something to signify the change of the POV.
| Jay 3/21/13 . chapter 1
I started reading your first chapter, and one of the first things that jumped at me is the fact that you keep switching tenses, sometimes even in the span of a sentence.
"Quickly, I armed my missiles..." and then, in the same paragraph - "Then I speed above the mass of..."
It really stands out, and I think some consistency in the tense could draw readers deeper into the action.
| inkfngrz 3/13/13 . chapter 4
That's a scream.
I love Kraal! (You know, despite the obvious fact that he invaded Area 51, kidnapped/took Katie, and hacked into the government's computer base.) He's got this whole tough-guy suave thing going and does it so effortlessly. My compliments and a huge thumbs up! (Also really like the first-person narration switch between the two characters.)
I am definitely following you and the story!
| Hiroko Hana 2/2/13 . chapter 1
I would like to tell you that I just had to give you major props for your creative summary, really catching!
The story is quite good too, although, I did catch some spelling errors. Nothing to big, just enough to confuse the sentence but are easily passed.
Either than that I quite enjoyed this fine tale.
Keep it up!
| decapowers 1/22/13 . chapter 2
This is a great Science fiction story. I'm really hooked. Your aliens are realistic and the description is at a good standard. KEEP GOING!
| Guest 1/21/13 . chapter 2
It's kinda hard to just pass by your story and i find i don't actually regret it much. I'm waiting on an update. Don't disappoint.