I love the interaction between the three friends! The computer simulator sounds amazing, I wish i could find one like that. Hopefully Jonathan is able to put the pieces together soon! Still love Carl's family!

i love, love, love this! Please keep writing more!

I love Carl's family, his dad is hysterical!

I am really liking the friendship between the three, the compliment each other very well, all bringing different gifts to the friendship

wow, great chapter!

It sounds like someone actually built the car and has it running! Amazing the way it runs, if someone could really build something like that, it could solve a lot of problems!

I am really liking the character development and the way they interact!

My favorite part about this are the paragraphs that let us see Johnathan's thoughts about the Universe. Those were the most entertaining. Second to that is the dynamic between the trio (including Carl). It's definitely a friendship I'd look forward to seeing develop.

A few run on sentences in the beginning and odd phrases but it's like you worked out the kinks as you wrote. Other than one obvious grammar mistake that must have been a weird typo, it felt like you had an editor for that.

The whole scene getting William to his house safely dragged on for a bit and made me forget the wonder I had about where the story would go, but the development of the characters was necessary (even if you could have done it a different way).

I'm going to follow this because I did enjoy reading it, and Johnathan's wonder at the universe is very easy to feel about the story itself and where it can go.

Amazing start! I love the depth of your characters and look forward to reading more!

Great job!