|Reviews for Ragnarok|
| Lucent Blade 2/19/13 . chapter 1
Hey, your story is pretty good, but It needs some editing. If you'd like, with your permission, I'd edit it for you. Hit me up if you are looking for an editor.
| The Great Spirit of Writing 2/18/13 . chapter 3
Copying a part of J.K. Rowling's work is against the rules.
Not allowed: Copying from a previously published work (including musical lyrics) not in the public domain.
There are still many, many problems with grammar, spelling, and paragraphs. You might look into getting a different editor and running your writing through a program like Microsoft Word.
| The Great Spirit of Writing 2/18/13 . chapter 2
I noticed a continuous problem regarding your dialogue quotations.
"Well me and Sylar came over and he asked You to go and get his project"
"Well, Skylar and I came over; he asked you to go get his project."
"Skylar and I came over, and Skylar asked you to go get his project."
There is a period before the second quotation mark.
| The Great Spirit of Writing 2/18/13 . chapter 1
Please edit and repost the first chapter. I can't read it.
| Lynn K. Hollander 1/26/13 . chapter 1
The capitalization is not standard. In general, only the beginning letter of a sentence, the pronoun 'I' and proper nouns (names) are capitalized. The last sentence should look like this: After cleaning myself up in a nearby stream, I slowly made my way home; not like this: After Cleaning My Self Up In A Nearby Stream, I Slowly Made My Way Home.
The punctuation needs attention and there are many sentence fragments. The work would benefit from an attentive editing.
| Ed Harley 1/17/13 . chapter 1
Fearless capitalization, boldly fragmented sentences; an assault on the gods of grammar themselves- battle on noble warrior!