It's a very interesting poem. I like that it deals with Kindship in a way I think happens a lot. He becomes corrupt and the people overthrow him. I've been talking about this in English because i'm reading Macbeth. I think you did a fantastic job ;).

I really liked this piece. I could feel and see the "he" of the poem. I love the ending. write on!

I like this piece very clever. I wonder if its inspired or based on anything? The imagery and narrative are fantastic - really something to be proud of. This is just a brilliant piece overall and I'm really glad to see more of your work. Great piece, which I will happily favourite! :)