|Reviews for The Haunted House|
| JadedPhoenixBurning 1/26/13 . chapter 1
I tried to read this but found that two issues made it very difficult. I'd drop the bold since it is hard on the eyes if you have too much of it. The second is that there needs to be paragraphs rather than a wall of text. Remember with dialogue that every time a new individual speaks they get their own paragraph as well. Let me know if you edit and repost.