(FP won't let me log in) Yes! A kiss! But the um... marriage part? A bit unexpected from Leo, but wonderful nethertheless ;) AND WHY DID YOU HAVE TO END IT THERE?

Hullo! I'm so happy you updated, anyway; this seems like on of the best chapters I've ever read. I love it how you can describe any detail (which I cannot do) so I imagine exactly what was going on. I also love Jackie in this chapter, even if she didn't narrate it. ;)

This is really cool :) I love Jackie

Really enjoying this so far, it has a nice flow to it and I love how you can instantly relate to the characters. Looking forward to reading more!

Great chapter! I like Jackie, she seems like one of those laid back oblivious to love kinda girls at the moment, not sure if that's what you were going for...
Only thing is, I felt like 'dude' was used a lot. But I know some people do say it often... keep on writing :)

My actual username :)
Okay...MORE MORE MORE!
I liked this chapter-it was definitely well written and I have a feeling that I'm gonna love the characters!