|Reviews for The Acolyte|
| Luna's Child 3/10/13 . chapter 18
Ahh, damn you Caden! How could you hurt Adelina like that?! Seriously, why do guys purposely hurt the girls they like? I'll never understand men.
Well, now I'm curious as to what will happen with Adelina? Will she travel alone, or will the Gods give Caden a good beating and force him to make it up to her. So many questions, yet not enough chapters. Update!
| Luna's Child 3/10/13 . chapter 17
Oh? Did Caden smile? I'm just going to assume that he did :P He can no longer hide his feelings for her. It's so obvious that he's in love with Adelina! Now, on to the next chapter.
| Luna's Child 3/10/13 . chapter 16
The shadow creatures are very interesting: you did a good job with their description. Also, Adelina has grow up quite a bit since we first met her. I hope that nothing will take advantage of her since she exhausted her energy supply. I'm moving on to the next chapter.
| Luna's Child 3/3/13 . chapter 15
"they village was still waiting for food to regrow..." "They" should be "the."
"Not all of the still believe in Sarket and Tinan" "The" should be "them."
"Caden had butchered the hair and thrown it in a small soup pot..." "Hair" should be "hare."
Haha, I found it cute when Da'de acted like Adelina's older brother, threatening Caden to not hurt her. And I knew that it was Caden all along who placed flowers in Adelina's room. He's not much of a word kind of guy; from how you described him, he prefers to show his feelings by his actions, in privacy of course :P. Still, I hope that he'll eventually grow some balls and tell Adelina how he really feels.
| Luna's Child 3/3/13 . chapter 14
"You're element is very strong and proud." It's actually "your" :).
"Adelina knew the precise money they found it, too." What do you mean by that line? Is that a type of expression, or did you mean she knew the precise "moment?"
Aww, Caden said he loves Adelina! Whether or not he actually meant it is another thing, but regardless, he still said it! 3
| Luna's Child 3/3/13 . chapter 13
"The stopped and regarded the two as they walked into the village." I believe you meant to say "he."
"It was a beautiful day at the beginning of he summer growing season" Hah, here you meant to say "the" xD.
"the pour water over it" It should be "then." Sorry if I seem like a grammar Nazi; I know that you are a more than capable writer, but I find it helpful to point these small details out. I make grammar mistakes of my own, but I don't notice them until after I post them online, so I personally appreciate it whenever a reader points them out to me.
Aside from those spelling errors, the chapter was pretty good. I especially like the crow, he reminds me of myself xD
| Luna's Child 2/25/13 . chapter 11
Ah ha! I knew that Caden felt something for Adelina. It is only a matter of sucking up his pride and simply accepting it. Great chapter, the story line is really getting interesting.
| Luna's Child 2/3/13 . chapter 10
Bah, men are so confusing q.q
Anyhow, great chapter. Keep up the good work :)
| Luna's Child 1/30/13 . chapter 9
Another great chapter. Please update!
| Luna's Child 1/26/13 . chapter 8
Hah, nice chapter. I can't wait to read more :)
| Luna's Child 1/25/13 . chapter 7
I like how you gave vital information to the background story of the gods and what is currently going on in the world for the goddess to have decided to need a human representative. Write more chapters!
| Luna's Child 1/25/13 . chapter 6
Hah! I knew Caden had some humanity in him. And it must be quite the adventure for Adelina: from almost getting raped to finding out that a goddess as chosen her as her representative on Earth. All in all, this is an excellent story!
| Luna's Child 1/25/13 . chapter 5
Aww, maybe Caden is just reserved due to his profession as an assassin. I'm sure he has some humanity in there.
| Luna's Child 1/25/13 . chapter 4
Once again, this was an excellent chapter. Sucks that Caden got stabbed and all, but it's cool how Adelina was able to burn that one guy. I look forward to reading more.
| Luna's Child 1/23/13 . chapter 3
Once again, this was an excellent chapter. I don't see anything that requires editing, so good job!