I loved it, and i loved the drama between the parents too.

Good job :3

10/10!

Oh, you! o

I don't see any problems, other than grammar.

Keep it up, if it don't gets updated, I'm going to explode into cheese.

Hmmmm interesting concept. But something feels missing.

More? Please?

In the first few sentences you forgot to add capitals to the first words as well as other random words throughout the story. Despite this, I enjoyed the topic, and I'm glad that it ended well xD