|Reviews for One More Beat|
| kingofe3 5/20/13 . chapter 1
This is a wonderfully made one shot. Not long, quick to the point, and heartwarming. I'm glad Yusei found purpose in life again, I'm sad Kei didn't get to live her life fully, but happy she met someone who cared for her life, and I'm pleased to have read this.
| HerCrimsonTears 2/1/13 . chapter 1
Wow..I loved it. [And hated it cuz it was so sad..lol]
This story was kind of different from your normal writing style, and it was really refreshing. Thanks for the story, Edge!
| Katsurou Shimizu 1/29/13 . chapter 1
Curse you Edge! This has Angel Beats written all over it!
But seriously, the romantic in me loved it. And I can relate somewhat because of the mistakes I did in the past, and forsaking myself for a period of time while back in college.
Somewhere, I had wished there was a girl I could help, or anyone basically; a life I could give because I was so damn worthless at that time.
That is why Angel Beats got to me, and broke me down.
And that is why this story broke me down again.
| Honeycloud of RiverClan 1/26/13 . chapter 1
[Hah! Thought I'd say that did you?]
You're missing a comma.
[Well, I didn't figure it out myself actually.]
I think there's another missing comma...
| ScarletRose7865 1/26/13 . chapter 1
Ouch. I think my heart was just ripped out...I love it! Fast paced, gritty, emotional...my kind of story. Thanks for the read :)
check out my book if you have time too. its my first attempt at writing one
| Yuuenchi 1/26/13 . chapter 1
This one is definitely a stomach puncher. I'm glad Yusei was able to recover purpose in his life, but sad that it had to come at the expense of Kie. On the other hand, Kie was able to do an amazing thing with her life in just meeting Yusei and returning him to the world. I wonder though though if just a one-day meeting is enough to break through the scabs that Yusei has surrounded himself with, even if you mean Kie to be the antithesis of the girl in the photograph.
You could almost fit into the Manga category, but I suppose Romance also works, though it seems more like a relationship fic than a romance proper.
Aside from a brief flurry of typos in the 8th paragraph down (counting the "clicks" as paragraphs) it's very smooth flowing story. Keeping it in the active-present tense helps even more. I call this story a success for your first outing.