Not a bad start! I can definitely see the Naruto influences in your writing.

I especially liked this line! "She had brown, silky hair, crimson brown eyes, and a body that was made for the eyes of perverts."

Good use of the cliffhanger to end the chapter as well.

i love this story .-.

Your story seems really interesting . I'm really curious as to what Satrou 's break is .

OHHHHH the premise has sooo much potential that I love. I want more.

and awwwweee, i want to see the duel, but now I have to wait for the next chapter. I'm hope I'm not disappointed.

Woah, you better update fast!