|Reviews for Offer Him Roses|
| Luna's Pen 5/20/13 . chapter 15
Thanks for another great chapter! I really liked his reaction-it's very realistic. I can't stand it when stories involving unintentional time travel involve immediate acceptance.
| James Hampton 5/14/13 . chapter 14
Hi, everybody, I really appreciate all the comments and will work hard to incorporate the great suggestions I have received. We are close to the end. Thanks again.-JH.
| Saydimon 5/10/13 . chapter 13
This story is so interesting, I just love it. I really thought Annalee was stuck in 1864, but luckily that wasn't the case. But, aw, that was their first fight...-ish. I mean, I guess it doesn't count as fighting? But, they were yelling at each other and what now.
Anyway, i'm really curious about her friends. Shouldn't they have called/texted her or something by now? Assuming she hasn't talked to them?
| Guest 3/6/13 . chapter 12
This story is nicely written so far. Annalee and Matthew's characterizations are pretty endearing, and their relationship is cute, though a bit rushed. A few things are bothering me, though:
1) Why isn't Matthew bothered that Annalee's not wearing dresses and skirts from the nineteenth century? You'd think he'd at least ask why she has such strange clothing.
2) Matthew's attitude towards Annalee would probably be rather sexist by twenty-first century standards, considering that women and girls were treated far differently around his time period than now. It'd be interesting to see him and Annalee's values clash, and a bit of a disappointment that you haven't brought that up.
3) What happened with Annalee's friends and Josh? They haven't even been mentioned since the second chapter. Are they going to show up again?
| pandachick97 3/6/13 . chapter 12
Update soon anxious for more
| Cinnamon Shards 2/28/13 . chapter 7
When Annalee first brought up that if Matthew never left the barn, he would never die, I felt my heart sink right down into my stomach. I knew that he couldn't stay there forever, but I didn't want the poor kid to go off and get shot. Still, I figured that if he had already died, then there was nothing our girl could do to change things. I prepared myself for a big dose of heartbreak down the road.
And then she went to the graveyard, and I was given a tiny, brilliant spark of hope that maybe, just maybe, things would work out alright.
In short, I think having the headstone change was a fantastic idea. :)
I'm a little curious as to why Matthew hasn't asked about her clothes yet. Even if she's wearing something simple, the materials would be a little strange to him, wouldn't they? I was also expecting a little more sexism -which sounds awful, but weren't women and girls treated differently during the Civil War than they are now? I might be wrong of course, since I don't know very much at all about American history, but Matthew just feels a little too...modern, I guess.
Anyhoo, I'll be talking to you again soon. ;)
| Cinnamon Shards 2/28/13 . chapter 5
Duck-walk might be a term I end up borrowing from you one day it's pretty much a perfect description of that little shuffle you do when you're crouching and don't want to stand up. I also love Annalee's nonchalant response to Matthew calling her beautiful, and the fact that she forgot to bring a fork. They were nice little touches. ;)
Can't seem to pick out anything that I found particularly distracting or off-putting about your writing...but it might just be because I'm in a hurry to get to the next chapter. I promise to be extra critical next time. :P
| Cinnamon Shards 2/28/13 . chapter 4
This one is a little short, so I don't have too much to say.
"...hot in a kind of skeletal way..."
Seems out of place coming from Annalee, even if it is just the voice at the back of her mind that never has anything nice to say. Maybe something a little less...blunt?
Loved how you built up the tension as she approached the barn. People always know how to scare themselves better than anyone else, and I think it was a great idea to have Annalee acting as her own worst enemy.
I'm really excited...
REALLY excited to see what happens next.
I'll see you at the end of the next chapter
| Cinnamon Shards 2/28/13 . chapter 3
I looooove a good dream sequence! :D
I like how much I'm learning about Georgia from this story. Do you live there? I never really considered it a beautiful place before, but way you describe it makes me wonder if I should plan a trip down there for peach season.
I think there might be smoother way to introduce her parents names at the beginning. Maybe just;
"Madeline and Theodore Rutledge observed their daughter with quiet concern."
So the formatting isn't so textbook-ish.
I was also a little bit disappointed that Annalee's dream wasn't longer. I hate to suggest padding, but maybe you could add a bit more interaction between our leading lady and mister Hawkins? She could walk him to the barn maybe? This is just my personal taste of course. I've had a taste of the good stuff and I want more. :P
Off I go to chapter four
| Cinnamon Shards 2/28/13 . chapter 2
Read this chapter before work this morning, but I didn't get a chance to leave a review, so Imma do that now.
First off, I totally feel for poor Annalee. Having people misunderstand you is an awful feeling, especially when you were only trying to be nice. Poor little darling.
Jonathan seems like he's going to be a lot of fun. I'm not even sure weather or not I like him (as a potential suitor for out protagonist that is) which I think makes Annalee's indecision very believable. Kara and Melissa don't come across as very good friends, which I think was intentional because Annalee seems like the kind of girl who spends a lot of time on her own.
I like that your chapters have their own arcs, beginning-middle-end wise. Makes them fun even on their own.
On to chapter three! :D
| pandachick97 2/28/13 . chapter 10
Omg im legit in love with story and you for making it update soooooon:3
| lolliabonbon 2/27/13 . chapter 10
A bath in the middle of the yard!
| Cinnamon Shards 2/27/13 . chapter 1
Fantastic summary -drew me right in and made me want to find out more. First line is also promising. Really excited. I'll let you know more once I finish reading chapter one. :)
| pandachick97 2/27/13 . chapter 9
Omg update soon im so excited for more
| lolliabonbon 2/24/13 . chapter 9
You update remarkably fast, which is nice xD. Matthew is adorable and poor Annalee with her insecurities about eating too much in front of others. They both seem so vivid.