:) This was great! I can't wait until you write more! I'm just wondering, is the guy who bumped into her a fellow teenager? When you say 'The man said before walking off' I think of some middle-aged guy (who is very sexy, but still) and not of a teenager. But besides that, I love the story. Great grammar by the way.

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Interesting beginning! Can't wait to learn more about your characters.