|Reviews for My Ending|
| Sintalion 1/29/13 . chapter 1
It is very hard to get into this story. It starts up slow with information that isn't engaging and too many sentences start with a verb-ing. That changes the flow and makes it sound choppy. You repeat a lot of words and phrases. I think this would benefit from an edit. :) you tell a good story but it gets lost in the repetition and such.