I think you have a real talent for telling a story and developing a setting and character. The descriptions of the school are wonderful, and you really capture the essence of loneliness in a new place, trying to adapt to a new culture. I also like how you criticize the uniformity of the other students. I like how she goes to school with her flip flops in her bag. I would really like to know what happens in the rest of this story. It sparked my interest.