i like this yu need to keep going

i like it alot its well written

Really interesting opening. First line is a great attention grabber, last line makes me want to keep reading. And not just because I have a soft spot for the fantasy genre. The prose is very well done. Great beginning, defininately keep it up :)

Wow! You paint with words. It was so beautifully detailed I felt like I was right there in the scene. I want more like yesterday. Please post again soon

Oh my god that was great! It was really short, but there was so much description and imagery! I could see everything in my mind! That was great! Please please please write more!