Woah! You've got a great hook :)

I really want to see where this will go and I hope you write more soon! No pressure, though. Is Marie Alice? I like the idea that this connects to Alice in Wonderland. Sorry I haven't read sooner... I really wish I had now because you're a really good author! I have to go to school now, but I'll definitely read the next chapter today. I really liked the layout on this one. Don't sell yourself short :)

This chapter was too short for my taste - and compared to the previous chapter - but it was good. However, this chapter did seem to be more rushed, almost as if you just wanted to get everything out.

The story that the twins told was . . . Well, what word(s) can I use? I wondered though, why did they kept on saying child and not the word "girl" or "boy" or "daughter" or "son?" It gives me the idea that you want to keep this child a mystery.

The last line for this chapter definately made it more . . . sinister - in a way.

Oh, and Nivens, the rabbit boy! It's sad how he was forgotten at the end.

Over all, this was an alright chapter.

This is amazing. I love it already and hope to see how the story unfolds in the future. Keep it up!