| Reviews for The Land of Mysteria |
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The Great Spirit of Writing 2/18/13 . chapter 1Could be an interesting concept, but seems overly cliched. Add some more information and adjectives. What is Mysteria like? How long have the orcs been fighting the village? |
pokefan113 2/18/13 . chapter 1Hm. This prologue is unsatisfying in its briefness, but opens a potentially good story nonetheless. Try to describe thoughts and surroundings more. Also attempt to lengthen the paragraphs, and make less start with "Alek". |