|Reviews for The Land of Mysteria|
| The Great Spirit of Writing 2/18/13 . chapter 1
Could be an interesting concept, but seems overly cliched. Add some more information and adjectives. What is Mysteria like? How long have the orcs been fighting the village?
| pokefan113 2/18/13 . chapter 1
Hm. This prologue is unsatisfying in its briefness, but opens a potentially good story nonetheless.
Try to describe thoughts and surroundings more. Also attempt to lengthen the paragraphs, and make less start with "Alek".