| Reviews for Mya and the Djinn |
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Newty4000 3/30/13 . chapter 7It's a very good story I really enjoy reading it |
Astro1mac 3/3/13 . chapter 5First off, I would like to say that I thoroughly enjoy your story. It's an interesting premise, and any suspense is pulled off pretty well. I would however, like to point out that your dialogue is rather... clunky. "I am" "you are" and other such phrases tend to make the conversations less natural. I would advise finding a way to make their speech more casual. |
Lovecupid 3/3/13 . chapter 5You'll need to watch your grammar. I noticed a few mistakes. But other then the chapters being short keep up the great work. Here is the mistakes I found: You are supposed to use "there" instead of their: "Mom, are their other creatures out there besides the Djinn?" I think you meant "angels": There are the angles I think you meant "your": they will do everything to make you not an issue |
Lovecupid 2/21/13 . chapter 1I just realized the title so this will be mostly about Mya. I wonder if you'll do a story about Rune then? Update soon! |
Lovecupid 2/21/13 . chapter 4This is an interesting story. I hope that the twins won't be separated for long. I have a twin brother and when we were younger we didn't like being separated so I understand Mya and Rune's feelings. But now that we are older we don't mind being separated as much. I hope that they will be able to find each other again. Keep up the great work! |