This was much better. Almost know silly mistakes and I think I actually like the story now. Oh and this has nothing to do with my opinion of the story but do you know how annoying it is to sa lol? Its like a tongue twister in my brain.

If you have the desire to continue, go right ahead. I recommend you find someone to edit the story with you though. I'm sure other people have mentioned it and asked but why did you call this an epilogue? That's either a stroke of artistic genius or just a silly mistake. I think you can salvage what you got here but you should probably read some books and see how professional authors go about telling stories. Again get someone to proof read and edit this and the next chapters. I hope to see you in improve.

Did you put 'Epilogue' on purpose? It is sort of an ending if your character is really saying goodbye. Though that would be sad because I don't want the story or the character to be over.

Why did you call your character WW1? What does it stand for if not 'World War 1'? I'm just curious.

I hope you keep writing. I am intrigued.

Typo: You've got DISSERVE in there instead of DESERVE.

Pretty sure it should be called a Prologue, rather than an Eplilogue - epilogue is ending (tying up all those pesky loose ends) and prologue is beginning (that moment that changes your character and their life).

Your writing is pretty good. I found no issue with it. The plot (what I know of it) isn't appealing to me. I'm not big on the whole I'd kill myself because I have pissed off everyone around me. Man up and fix the issue. But, I am sure there are readers out there who would enjoy the story.

Good luck with it all :)

Oh, and I was so pleased to see the femmeslash note. There is not enough femmeslash in the world :)

I think you mean prologue there, friend. And by the way I like it! Continue it before I die of sadness.