I loved how this was in parts and progression between them was perfect. It reminded me somewhat of Richard Parker in 'The Life Of Pi' maybe thats only because I read it recently. None the less this is a truly brilliant piece, please never stop writing!
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Oh my God... this is just... beautiful. I love the transition that you seem to go through, and the imagery is, once again, brilliant.

You have a really lovely and interesting style.