|Reviews for Rights Essay|
| Guest 3/11/13 . chapter 1
You have a few problems with spelling and punctuation and so forth - for instance, sometimes you use the verb "persecute" when what you wanted was the noun "persecution" - but the main problem with this essay is that it's often hard to tell what you're talking about if you don't mention names, dates, and places. (Sometimes you do; sometimes you don't. You ought to mention them more often.)
I will quote a few lines which really surprised or confused me.
* * * If that is the case, why did we chase the Christians across the country because we thought they were utterly wrong? * * *
That's vague and confusing. Which "Christian" group are you talking about? I don't think you mean that once upon a time, EVERY member of any "Christian church" in the entire country was being chased around by other people, do you?
* * * Why did we lock up Japanese people, who had been full citizens. in concentration camps? We believe that religion is your choice, and it is, but if the Government doesn't like it, they will do something about it. * * *
While it is certainly true that U.S. citizens of Japanese heritage were confined in camps during World War II, I've never read anything to suggest that this was done because of their RELIGION. So I really don't see what that sad episode in American history has to do with "freedom of religion."
* * * Even worse, we gave people the ability to kill certain people legally because we thought their religion was unacceptable. The people previously mentioned still don't think it is as bad because we were at war with that country. * * *
That's VERY vague. I simply can't tell what you're talking about, since you don't mention any names and dates! When did this happen? Exactly who was given "legal authority" to kill people? Which people were being targeted? How do you know that the reason some people were killed was that "we" didn't like their religion? Which country were we at war with? Who actually got killed, and why?
| Petra Arkanian 3/8/13 . chapter 1
Very interesting take on things. However, I would challenge that the Japanese camps were not due to religion but to race. BIIIIIIGGG difference. It was still wrong (have you read Farewell to Manzanar?), but as far as I know, it was totally on racial grounds. Also, I have not yet been made aware of a time where we "chased Christians" across the country - I'd be very interested to learn more. I think you could add to the strength of this essay by pointing out some racial injustices happening today - because there are a lot, even though people like to say there aren't. Again, a very interesting topic that is not discussed enough! Nice work.