this is very hard core. I agree with the others. This idea should be expanded upon. I am writing a story called "Wanderer" but it doesn't compare to this kind of detail.

Not bad, you should try turning that into more of a story, could possibly be a novel if you worked on it...

Yet another success! Again, a poetic style, though in this case slightly less than the first, but that's NOT a bad thing! Don't get me wrong. I could really feel the man's sadness lifting from the page and meshing with my own life and the feelings in it. It seems you've got the gift of being able to write wonderfully as opposed to simply scribbling blind words like so many of us do. You had better keep it up or I'll have to get some hired goons to do some nasty awful things to a defenseless rock! And you just KNOW that rock will be mad, really really mad! Oh, g's, I'm in one of my moods again...please forgive my strangeness, I'll shut up now. Amazing work, once again!

that's so sad.

Heee, I know who it is! Rurou means wandering, so so what? I have a deep and enormous problem today. This is all good. Except for the fact that it reminds me of a guy with an unshaved beard with a hooded trench coat walking on a rainy night under a street light through an alley. My imagination is becoming modern! NOOOO! Heh. Why's he rurouing around, though? Zere iz no reason to answer zat, zough, becauz I wonder and waunder too much to be answered. Lulala. See ya

omg gao..i really dont understand..but its ok, right? gee whiz..you and your big like..non-normal vocabulary..hehe. but yea..i like the death fairy sketch thingie and like yea..im bored and its 2:21 am..kinda crazy huh? its cuz i still have energy left from today..or..yesterday i yea..hum dee doo..gklfdgfdjgk jfdgl;dfsj gkld;fjg gjlfkd sjgklfd gjlfd gjkldjgl kfld;sjfk dg lfdj hehe ok bai!

Very good...but, I must say the same thing...It starts good, good, good, okish..good, weird. I think it's cause u start using words like "random" (last paragraph) etcetera. But keep writing and *question* What's with all the Sketch of a _? I don't get it but I like your stories. They're not quite rosa's anime hyper-active stories.. which i like don't kill me rosa! ... they're emeraldy which is good too. ok, bye bye!

Well, if as you said reviewing makes you write better who am I to stand in your way? :-) I really liked the sketch, very well done. I really like how you manage to give him a past, a present, and a dark forebearing look at his future and manage to do it so elegantly and poetically. A few questions: why are you doomed to hell for being helpless? What forged his downfall to a man regarded by society as a bum? and, above all, WHEN ARE YOU WRITING MORE?

ooo, very good! I like the "carries painful secrets and collected truths" and "even his family and friends have shelved his existence away in the back drawers of their minds" very very much! This is a really good description of a wanderer. But how come he is doomed to hell? Has he become a wanderer becasue of something he did in the past? ooo..makes u think. Hehe, good job!