Hi, this is a really cool idea you guys have going. But I think you should maybe re-write the summary that accompanies the story, as I think you've gotten "avenge" and "revenge" mixed up. Also, you might want to work on the spacing of the piece a bit so that it is easier to read, but I understand that sometimes fp messes up spacing, just thought I'd point these things out!

Dravenx

Interesting story, I don't think I've ever seen a revenge story quite like this. My only guff is the lack in detail, for example: What's the date that this story takes place in? What were the keikan wearing, a suit or nothing? Well, I have to say that this story is good and I would like to read some more.